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Poor Poor Hal.Always crying .Yet so much pussy.Those tears should be tears of joy.All that pussy to eat.Just never satisfied.I’m really enjoying this story,I never know witch direction its going.I’m going to miss Shona tho.Or am I?

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This Chapter had a look not only into an alternative future for Hal, but a nice glimpse into his internal motivations, which I enjoyed as well.

Seriously who needs all of that second guessing.

I thought I noticed a typo but rereading it I couldn't spot it so I was probably mistaken.

I look forward to the next chapter as always!

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Thanks. I'm learning about the characters as I write this. I think some of that will go into the final draft for publication.

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For sure! character developement takes time.

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